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Shingeki no Kyojin OC - Kuroyukihime by kuroyukihime666 Shingeki no Kyojin OC - Kuroyukihime by kuroyukihime666
her lore:
Kuroyukihime was born in Shinganshina city. Her parents were eaten by a smiling titan in front of her eyes, and now she has PTSD because of that and she dislikes titans. She spent 2 years in orphanage where she was bullied horribly because everyone were jealous of her looks (especially her eyes) so they hated her and she cried herself to sleep every night. Then finally she was adopted by Ackerman family and she met her older aniki Levi. Levi loved her from a bottom of his heart and confessed to her but she said that they can't be together because they are family now :( He cried a little but he realized that it's indeed forbidden love. She decided to join the army to take care of her aniki (even though he was the humanity's strongest she was even stronger because she was extremely talented and well trained by her dead parents whom everyone respected in Shinganshina). She joined Survey Corps instantly without even being prepared by Keith so now she's the youngest soldier of them all.
TO BE CONTINUED (i will include rest of the story in another sheet!:) )
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:iconfern-sama:
Fern-Sama Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2018  Student Digital Artist
Pixis is married with kids... he would have no interest in some young child. 
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:iconkuroyukihime666:
kuroyukihime666 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2018
have u even read her lore? -.- she is crushing on him, but he doesn't even now it. it's her crush and it's really heartbreaking for her cuz she knows that he has a wife ;-; thats why she won't confess to him ;-;
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Fern-Sama Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2018  Student Digital Artist
ah, very well that makes sense *thumbs up*
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:iconkuroyukihime666:
kuroyukihime666 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2018
^-^ love is a complicated thing :(
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:iconfern-sama:
Fern-Sama Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2018  Student Digital Artist
indeed it is, its complicated and the bane of humans
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:iconfidelibus:
Fidelibus Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
Great job, don't listen to anyone's comments about you being a troll! You love your OC and that's what matters most! :D

Happy new year as well~
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:iconkuroyukihime666:
kuroyukihime666 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2018
thanks!! Happy new year to you :)
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SarahChanCandy Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
OBVIUSLY A T R O L L
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:iconkuroyukihime666:
kuroyukihime666 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2018
why the frick does everyone call me a troll -.- im just trying to improve and everyone here is hating on me
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:iconkuroyukihime666:
kuroyukihime666 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2018
i hate this site i think i will delete my account
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SarahChanCandy Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
do it
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:iconkuroyukihime666:
kuroyukihime666 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2018
im reporting you for encouraging me
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SarahChanCandy Featured By Owner Edited Jan 1, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
its a ridicolous reason, its the internet, no one cares your or my opinion.
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:iconkuroyukihime666:
kuroyukihime666 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2018
exactly no one cares about your opinion so shut up
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SarahChanCandy Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
you first c: I think, nobody take you seriusly. 
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Pexxastar Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2017  Student Digital Artist
OMG ... wth ? .. Is this joke or are you serious ? i am quite confused ..
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:iconkuroyukihime666:
kuroyukihime666 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2017
why would i joke like that .-.
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Pexxastar Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2017  Student Digital Artist
I dont know normally if you have multicolored OC in AOT universe you Are troll ? Taking this aside i would love to know more about ur OC :3
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GrimaceJester Featured By Owner Edited Aug 31, 2017  Student Digital Artist
Tbh, I find her cute but she doesnt fit into the universe of AOT, her looks overall  feels like she belongs in a magical related anime such as something like sailor moon or so.

 I think you should give her a much more realistic, less colorful approach since AOT characters are well pretty  none colorful characters XD

 I mean, nothing wrong with giving her a bit of color but not too much. Idk if you are a young  girl but which ever the case, don't take this the wrong way, I AIN'T against you, im trying to help and if you don't need my advice that's ok too!

I respect ya.
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Queen-Of-Cardss Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Omg i love it
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kuroyukihime666 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2017
thanks ^_^
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Queen-Of-Cardss Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No problem!
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djpiggy557 Featured By Owner Edited Jul 30, 2017
Jesus Christ all mighty I hope this is a troll.

Besides the shitty name hair colour and backstory that breaks lore in hundreds of ways, she's crushing on Pixis. I assume you mean Dot Pixis... Who's like 60+ years old.
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GrimaceJester Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2017  Student Digital Artist
 She is possibly a minor, like for real a minor so take it easy on her. Just ignore if you don't like it you know? no need to be so rude, I get it, it doesnt fit in AOT. Is not realistic enough for AOT but who cares? just let it be.

You have better things to do, I'm sure. One day, the girl will learn and she will for sure improve but as of right now, this is most likely a minor who you are criticizing. Just the way she writes and behaves, to me that's a little kid.

You should never make a little kid feel bad, instead give out a helpful advice and if she is rude just ignore her because after all she is the one making herself look bad and obviously ''immature''
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djpiggy557 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2017
Yeah sure, whatever you say
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LunarSpawnSerenata Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2017
I'm pretty sure this is a minor who made this. No offense to the creator.
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djpiggy557 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2017
Mhm RP Face: Roll eyes 
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:iconteddyvoid:
Teddyvoid Featured By Owner Edited Jul 27, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Firstly I'd like to share my opinions and how you could possibly improve this character.
For starters, her name. Kuroyukihime is not a name you would see in Attack on Titan ever. Isayama hasn't nor will he possibly even consider putting in a character with a name so Japanese like in this story.  It does not fit. Most characters, Like Bertholdt and Erwin, have German names. I'd also like to address her Appearance. It's ALL incorrect. First, her hair. It reminds me of that character in the anime "Danganronpa", her name is Jinx Mioda. It's way too "futuristic" and "other universe" like for this anime's theme. It isn't a natural hair color like red/orange, brown/brunette, blonde, black and grey. It has unnatural highlights that would have to use dye (pressumably) to be a color of her hair, in which case hair dye doesn't exist in this universe. Nor does "neko" ears. There are hybirds (titan shifters) in Attack on Titan, but none have any animal like features such as this.
And her shirt is pink. This isn;t much of a problem but noone really has that color shirt in the universe. Also, he uniform is way too altered. Her boots are not supposed to be pink, they are supposed to be brown, dark brown because they're leather. And dyeing leather bright and frilly wasn't a thing in the walls. And they're too high, reaching to far past her calves. You have to stay consistent of the uniform if this OC is meant to be a soldier in the army. You would probably be punished in real life if you were in the military and altered your uniform to such great lengths. And wear are her pants? The commanders surely would let her fight if they saw her like this. Also that accessory on her left thigh isn't appropriate for her age (presumming she's younger and or around the age of the original cadets). Her eyes are heterochromatin, which is not a problem at all, but her eye colors are not normal at all. Red and pink eye colors are not a possible thing. The closest color to red a character or real person could have is amber. If this was an anime like Black Buutler or Vampire Night, that eye color could be acceptable.

Now her personality and backstory. As you may heard before, you're OC is very mary-sueish. A mary-sue character is a character with unbelieve looks, a bright and cheery personanilty, everyone likes her. In other cases a mary-sue character is always paired/shipped with a very beloved character, like Levi. Their backstory is very cliche` and overused. ALOT of OCs in Attack on Titan have their parents eaten by titans (not complaining though, because it's common in this universe for someone to be eaten). And her being related to Levi, yet living a rather "lavish" lifestyle is not possible. If you don't know Levi was born and raised in the Underground city. Which is VERY povertish and such. Kuroyukihime wouldn't be able to be adopted by Levi because he was caught by Erwin Smith during a chase and was forced to join the Survey Corp or be arrested. Meaning he would have no time to "adopt" a child and raise he/she properly. And if he did have a child under his wing, said kid would (probably) be forced to stay with another family because this is the MILITARY. And Levi and your OC Kuroyukihime's relationship makes Levi VERY OOC (Out of Character). Levi wouldn't cry because he can't be in a couple relationship, especially with his "adoptive sister." Also, she's WAY TOO overpowered. It isn't possible for her to be stronger than Levi, because he is an Ackerman, and the Ackerman family bloodline is special and powerful. Kuroyukihime is adopted. She wouldn't be able to be stronger than him, because that also mean Kuroyukihime is stronger than Mikasa. And her instantly joining the Survey Corp without the proper training is impossible. She has to be trained. No shortcuts. The only canon character who instantly joined the Corp with training is Levi, on the exception that he was given a choice: Join or be arrested.
Another thing I'd like to address is her relations with they canon characters. They're not possible. Not every male character can love her/have a crush on her. She can't be too likeable. Also her crush on Commander Pixis is very wrong. He's and old man, possibly in his sixties. With a family I believe. It's very wrong and possibly downright pedophillia.

My suggestions are to change her overall apperance, personality and relations. Along with her backstory. They're very cliche` and mary-sueish. He hair looks black-ish. You could make is black, like Bertholdt and Levi's. And shorten it to be more realistic in this anime. And make her uniform like everyone elses. It's not possible for her uniform to be altered like that. Take it down a notch and tone down with her relations. Not everyone can like you so not everyone can like your OC. If she has a crush on a canon character or 2 that's fine and vice versa, but don't make all the boys like her.

Also you didn't credit the base.
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GrimaceJester Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2017  Student Digital Artist
I think the main issue is, her oc is cute but it doesnt match the universe of AOT. Even so I think people should not give her shit for it, instead advice and if she is rude to people still well that's on her.

But to me this person strikes me as a young individual or an actual troll but they have stated they are serious so it could be a young girl, people need to chill cus they be arguing with a kid :/
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Teddyvoid Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wait, she's a youngster?
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My-Senpai-Eren Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well said.. Very Well said..
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:iconteddyvoid:
Teddyvoid Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ah, glad you think so
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My-Senpai-Eren Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
XD
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Teddyvoid Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I actually hope the creator reads it and takes it in consideration 
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My-Senpai-Eren Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah, me too. She's just a "bit" unrealistic... Okay very unrealistic. Though I've made some terrible Ocs. But they don't come close to hers.
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Teddyvoid Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I made OCs as well, and even though they aren't as good I put very much thought in my OCs, alot of us do!

Her OCs feel as if she created them after those one or two episodes with Commander Pixis.
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My-Senpai-Eren Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yep... but why him??? Why not Erwin or I don't know Zeke. He's older. But not Pixis. The man probably reeks of alcohol.
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Weirdo-Dummy Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2017  Hobbyist
Oh, I really hope this is some kind of joke...
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kuroyukihime666 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2017
why would it be? -_- its my oc, not a joke
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Weirdo-Dummy Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2017  Hobbyist
Why would it be a joke? Some people have weird senses of humor or get bored way too easily.
This is your character...? Perhaps you should make a better character.
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kuroyukihime666 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2017
but i like this character
ur opinion doesn't matter :)
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Weirdo-Dummy Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2017  Hobbyist
Yes, yes, stubborn people are always fun.
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kuroyukihime666 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2017
right? just like my OC!! :3
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Weirdo-Dummy Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2017  Hobbyist
Whatever floats your boat, hun.
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ChibiMerry Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2017
I don't say that to be mean but that's OC is...first like a Mary-Sue because someone better like Mikasa or Levi is not possible and her history is not logical at all it doesn't fit with the history and that think that everybody loves her....that's typicall of a Mary-Sue....
Her name is also strange because it's a japanese name and in snk there is more european names (Mikasa is an exception but there's no many asian) and your OC doesn't look like she's japanese.
And those color like blue purple and Pink are impossible in that too that's also why you're OC doesn't fit in the snk universe.

She would be fine for another anime but not for snk sorry to say that >< 

Sorry for my bad english too.
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two things.

1 (Spoilers Levis OVA and Manga)
. Levis Family was poor and lived in the underground. His Mother also died when he was a littel child. So she can't be adobted from Levis Family. Also I think Levi wouldn't cry just because she rejected him

2. I think tht she's pretty Mary Sue
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kuroyukihime666 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2017
i don't get it, why does everyone call her mary sue? she seems well developed for me. :(
i only watched anime so levi's family is all right in my headcannon! :)
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pinkDiamond1362 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2017
It's because you made you charcter TOO strong. Also not every Main Charcter can love her thats to unrealstic
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kuroyukihime666 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2017
she's well trained so why can't she be strong? is everyone in this universe supposed to be weak bitches like armin? >:(
not every main character loves her, only levi, eren, jean and armin... that's not everyone... if she was real you would love her too so it's not unrealistic, she's just simply a very stunning girl :)
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pinkDiamond1362 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2017
1. She can be storn. But not Strong like Mikasa or Levi. They're just so strong because of the Ackerman gen. And she isn't a biologic Ackerman. And Armin may be weak but he is really smart.

'olny' four Charcter loves her. That's not makeing it better. Also how do you want know if I would like her ? You don't really know me.
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